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The clock read 10:53 PM and with the sunroof open, they sat speechlessly in his car. He glanced at the dangling rosary under the rear-view mirror, looked in her eyes, and then, offered his hand. Instinctively, she stared at his hand, smiled, and filled the spaces in between his fingers.
I’ll stop the world and melt with you.
You’ve seen the difference and it’s getting better all the time.
And boy, did he want to melt.
She reached through the void of the rooftop with an open palm and whispered, “It’s so close but so far away…”
“Yeah… just like you.”
He did not dare look into the windows of her soul and instead kept his gaze at the stars, praying that his wish would come true. For a split second, he waited for her response, for her to at least turn in his direction and reciprocate the same longing that he had for her. He pondered on what other possible curses she would bless upon him under their clear view of heaven.
The cell phone on her lap buzzed with vibration. Somehow, he knew it was time to let go.
With her newly-liberated hand, she looked at the caller ID, silenced her phone and refocused her attention on the stars. At least she looked like she did.
He already knew, but he decided to ask anyway: “Who was it?”
“Huh? Oh… It was just Markus.”
The future’s open wide.
“How come you didn’t pick up? You should call him back.”
“It’s okay. I’ll talk to him later.”
And at that moment, he realized that even if he saw a thousand more shooting stars after the one he already wished on, his wish had already, haphazardly, come true: she was happy.
3 comments:
Your prose writing style is easy to get engrossed in! You keep it straightforward but at the same time you can add your own stylistic devices (with the song and the metaphorical imagery).
Keep going, miss :)
Awww... Nez! This excerpt made me feel so sad! I like the flow though -- everything seemed to come together naturally. You should consider joining National Novel Writing Month:
http://www.nanowrimo.org/
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Tell me if you join!
What great writing keep it up.
Best wishes,
Annie
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