"Puppet,
Sing for me;
You've been quite a while
And I can't see anything
clean.
Get what I mean?
The tables and stairs
are all over the air
basked in dirt;
Forget if you're hurt--
Puppet,
another request:
The tv is on,
The computer is gone;
I need change.
Gettin' this game?
Your turn to provide
all the things I do hide
from your face,
in this messy place--
Puppet,
what's the time?
There's cooking to do,
the bird's gone cuckoo
in its cage.
(You're far from beige).
Why haven't you started
when everything's parted;
insane!
What's your name?--
Oh, Puppet!
Answer now,
Why are you so angry
when all I am saying
is this:
Can you give me a kiss?"
...
"Where are you going,
the wit isn't showing,
you know!
...Come back home!
You'll be happy later,
and sober, and stable
with greens.
Don't run from me!
I've made your decision
with clear-cut precision,
Now wait.
You'll have to sit still,
and wait."
----
I know
From your past,
You are right.
But a new race
is here
and I'm running.
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3 comments:
The significance of the hyphen is intriguing, and of course bemusing.
I liked the idea of the format. The rhyme was good; the only thing I thought was "off" was the use of the word "beige"... it seemed a bit forced there.
When you start with these lines, though..
"Where are you going,
the wit isn't showing,
you know!
The poem's whole argot seems to shift to a more... lax, yet bitter sounding one. Was that your motive? And the last stanzas deviated even more from the original rhyme scheme you made. Is that your way of showing how the puppet refuses to do what you want?
And when you say puppet, are you referring to yourself being a "slave" of sorts?
My understanding is that the new "race" is a new competition for love--perhaps maybe love of something... like religion? freedom? expression?
Charmaine made a good call on the tone of bitterness. I'm not sure what the relationship is between the puppet and the puppet-master, but there is definitely this huge gap. I feel like it could represent the relationships between parents and children, God and us, older siblings and younger siblings, husband and wife... the list can go on.
The huge gap exists because one is practically forced into a role that feels uncomfortable for him/her. Yet he/she can't really escape because of their love (and thus, loyalty) for their "master" or person of higher authority. But the ending describes how one can't truly love unless they learn to love and live for themselves. And so, it goes back to the race for love.
We run to live and we live for love.
Amazing poem!! =)
And if my analysis was wayyy off, then just know that your poem hit me really hard. Haha. =D
@charmaine - I guess the word "beige" is a little bit off, but it is a pretty significant line in general. I meant for the poem to represent my feelings towards parents making decisions for their kids. It's a whole parent to child relationship going on. And when it starts with the second stanza, yes the rhyme is different because the "puppet-master" is getting thrown off-guard. The puppet is beginning to rebel, you could say.
And, of course the final stanza is completely off the rhythm because the puppet has now finally decided to make their own decisions. They don't want to "follow" what the puppet-master wants, which of course would include being consistent in poetic scheme.
And yes, the puppet is in reference to myself, but after looking at Nez's comment, it can in general be anyone who feels the same.
@nez - You are pretty good at analysis! You got a lot of it as I planned it to be interpreted. The poem really can be interpreted in a lot of ways, and I didn't realize that until you mentioned it. But like I said to Charmaine, it was originally intended to be of reference to a parent to sibling relationship. And yes, there is bitterness because of following things that a child wouldn't want to follow just because a parent said so. Because of this, there is that huge gap you mentioned.
And you're right, the puppet does feel a bit trapped because there is this torn decision of whether to follow or not follow the puppet-master, all because of love. The "new race" was actually more of a referral to the decision to be independent, BUT it can be interpreted as a race for love amidst the confusion of what decision to make.
Good job! :]
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